Code Geass

[Takashi8188]

yes there is one coming i just need to write it first...it may be a while...sorry though...hope its worth the wait

[dantheman073]

IT is defenitly worth the wait lol! Looking forward to it

[Big_Boss]

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Fear_Itself wrote:
Rebellion, Revolution, Reconstruction.

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F*ck yeah!

[GeneralZCD]

This is a good story, but I'd like to point out some flaws...

1.When Lelouch goes to talk to Milly, shouldn't she be more shocked and frightened? Because he was a tyrant and people were scared of him, so I would think that she would be more shell shocked.

2.Shouldn't you specify if Lelouch was brought back to life or if he was just "hiding in the shadows" for 18 years?

3.C.C doesn't show that much emotion, so I wouldn't of added the exclamation marks in her sentences because she acts like nothing can stun her.

4.Make some of Lelouch's sentences more sophisticated, because he didn't get shocked too easy, and had more of an, "answer a question with a question theme" so I wouldn't of made him sound so relaxed.

5.WTF????? Kallen and Lelouch? Come on!!!!  (This is your story, but still, we know almost nothing that says that they really had feelings for one another.)

6. Could you explain more about some of the minor characters? I was confused a bit about who was who's child.

7. I can't remeber who Isaac is, (I do remember the name, but not the character,) so could you remind me, and tell me why he would be the antagonist?

8.Why would there be a guy named Zach in Japan? Not really Japanese...

9.How did Isaac take down Zero's guard so easily?

10.Why does Isaac want the World's Power to be restored to it's former self?

11.I think that Kallen would do a little more "puching and kicking and shoving Lelouch to the ground" when she first see's him again, and then starts to cry.

12.Mabye edit some of the words, to make it a little more Code Geass-E?

13.When did Lelouch have Sex with Kallen?

14.Maybe say a little more about the new type of Knightmares (since it's only been 18 years....)

15.I just don't see Kallen getting so emotional over Lelouch's comeback, plus, I really don't think that she would tell him that she loved him as soon as he came back. (That would be pretty awkward.)

I'm sorry to list so many things that I spotted, but I just would like to see this if they made this the R3, but this is your story, so don't change if it you don't want to. Beside all of this, it is a pretty good story, (the only weird thing that I'm not capable of coping with is that Kallen and Lelouch thing, it just seems so sudden, and I just don't see it happening, maybe more of a Lelouch and C.C thing? Still, great story.

[jamitrius]

Most of those statements concern Lelouch and Kallen, which I also thought was a bit out of hand, and as far as when they created this child... well that's saved for another episode?

[Zofthezerorequiem]

You should read through the comments before you criticize, GeneralZCD. Some of the stuff you pointed out has already been answered.

1) Takashi already admitted the Milly scene needed to be longer.

8) Zach isn't japanese? Neither is Lelouch, Milly, Rivalz, Shirley, Kallen, Nunnally, or Rolo. They're mostly from BRITTANIA.

9) because the zero squad is off their guard after 18 years of peace.

14) I already asked about the knightmares, and its because they haven't fought anybody in 18 years, so why build weaponry?

Half of the ones you have left are about Kallen and Lelouch, and that's cool that you don't agree.

and all the ones that aren't explained yet will be explained in later episodes, probably.

and i do agree with the comments about how Lelouch and C.C. speak. No offense Takashi.

[Noble10]

While I'm not the author of the story, as someone who had a small hand (a small Godhand) in it's creation, I think I can help address your points:

1. I suggested the same thing earlier. I think, to insure the progression of the story, not all of the characters' reactions to every event can be shown... imagine how long the fanfic would've been if every time a character discovered Lelouch was alive, Takashi wrote an entire chapter devoted to that person's reaction and feelings.

2.  I believe Takashi was going by some of the theories that already existed of Lelouch "hiding in the shadows". I remember one theory that Lelouch was hiding in a house in Australia, based solely on the fact that Mao briefly mentioned a house in Australia once in Stage 15.

3. I also mentioned that before. The only explanation I can give to that is: when an author readopts a work, they may have some artistic freedom with it's characters... yeah, I know that's a crappy reason.

4. This is Takashi8188 we're talking about, not Socrates or Henry James...  you should be satisfied he's spelling everything right! ... I'm not joking.

5. Well... Code Geass had it's share of plot twists... Takashi just decided to make one of his own. Plus, there was reason to believe LelouchxKallen could of happened.

6. I don't really know all the match-ups myself. However, if you don't mind some spoilers for the fanfic, you could look through the Character Submission Thread and find descriptions for the new characters, including who's child they are.

7. It's coincidental that you would ask that. Isaak (whom I've made a point to Takashi to use the uncommon "k" spelling instead of the traditional "c" sp...), is my character (the one I created and submitted), the Badass mothaf**ker who's gonna tear s**t up! Just kidding He's the leader of some faction and the current antagonist. As for why he's the antagonist...there really isn't an answer. Every story needs an antagonist or two (or fifty if we're talking about Code Geass).

8. Zach can be an exchange student... or someone who moved to Japan. There are probably several more explanations that work.

9. Isaak's just badass.

10. I'm hoping the answer would be revealed later... however, considering the "experience" of the writer, it's more likely to be a nonexistent plot-point, never to be mentioned again.

11. Again... artistic freedom.

12. Again... Takashi's not Henry James.

13. Again... I'm hoping the answer will be revealed although it's unlikel- come to think of it, I remember some talk about this in the Character Submission thread... talking about it would likely be a big spoiler. 

14. Actually, that's not a bad idea. Maybe you should mention that in the Character Submission thread (it kinda doubles as a big suggestion box).

15. Artistic freedom? Okay, maybe that's not the best excuse... but who knows what went on in her mind over those 18 years? Maybe she thought he was going to disappear soon and never come back (she certainly didn't expect him to die all of a sudden in Turn 25).

Sorry if I sounded rude in any of my answers... that's just the way Noble10 rolls.

[Takashi8188]

im truly greatful for your concern

but because i truly hate answering question by question

 - most of the things you were talking have completely been discussed in the Submission (/suggestion box ) thread - read through it and you'll find out a lot, and a bunch of spoilers (i warned so dont complain if you read something you wish you didnt)

and i am by far not a writer of the orginal Code Geass, so excuss me for not being able to perfectly put some characters then their proper rolls

- also...specficaly CC, in the 18 years that she's been away with Lelouch she has "come out of her shell" so i planned on making her a little less devoid of emotion (which you will see a few reasons why in episode 6 - when its done)

also....to Noble,

this is a very rare thing, but Noble

THANK YOU!!!!! you actually helped me a lot this time, and you explained most thing rather accurately and detailed enough to get the point across

and i agree with Noble's statement ...... you are lucky everything is getting spelled right (thanks to Fear_Itself)

[Noble10]

You're welcome.

And there's no need to thank me. I take solace in the fact that, while you are the writer and Fear is the common sense, I am the true "brain" behind this fanfic.

And as The Brain (on the right), I conjure Zetsubou Yuugi for no reason whatsoever! POWAH TO THE BRAIN!!!

Message Edited by Noble10 on 08-23-2009 09:16 PM

[Fear_Itself]

While we're on the subject, do you plan on explaining #13 within the story?

[jamitrius]

No sir, the true king of the jungle is the lion... as in leo. >.> <.<

[Takashi8188]

Yes actually, im planing on putting that in shortly, maybe in a flashback dream or something

but fear i'll let you pick, from Kallen's perspective or Lelouch's?

- i have ideas for both, and it will actually matter greatly as to who's perspective it is

[Fear_Itself]

Definitely Kallen's perspective.  Think you're experienced enough to write a lemon?

[Noble10]

You know, experience can be replaced with creativity... for some "interesting" results.

[Takashi8188]

actually... i could probably write the lemon easier than i've wrote the rest of the story

- you could probably guess why i say that

[Kodai_Okuda]

Ahem...I am patiently waiting for the next chapter Takahashi.

Preferably one in which we get to read about Kalulu smex...in graphic detail (but tasteful)...

you know, like how the G-string panties slowly come off down the long smoothly shaven legs... 

and the bra is undone allowing the straps to be slipped down over the baby-soft shoulders revealing supple breasts...

then Lelouch can take off Kallen's clothes.  jk.

[Takashi8188]

ok..here's the thing, i want to write that, but am i allowed to?

well...i guess i can write the ep, then post it somewhere where im allowed to have it and post a link to the place

but that particular episode wont be for a little while, like maybe ep 8 or 9

[Fear_Itself]

You can always post the beginning, and right before it gets explicit, you cut away with a message telling people to PM you if they want to read the rest.  Kinda like what people do when they post censored pictures and say the uncensored version is available via PM.

[katt_goddess]

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Takashi8188 wrote:

ok..here's the thing, i want to write that, but am i allowed to?

well...i guess i can write the ep, then post it somewhere where im allowed to have it and post a link to the place

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You can get banned for linking to graphic stuffs, whether it's the visual or the reading kind. I do know someone who got smacked for the same thing you're considering so I figured I'd better say something right away although I think that particular person had some severe pron addictions and had a tendency to go so far past explicit they'd make a nympho's orifices seal shut.

[Fear_Itself]

So, it'd still be OK if he provided the graphic stuff to people who asked for it via PM, since the private messaging system is both off-limits to the younger humans, and generally unmoderated?

[katt_goddess]

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Fear_Itself wrote:
So, it'd still be OK if he provided the graphic stuff to people who asked for it via PM, since the private messaging system is both off-limits to the younger humans, and generally unmoderated?

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Part of me fears that he [or anyone else for that matter] could still get busted on it if it became public type knowledges that that's what is going on. Dirty FanFics still get pulled from the boards after all and those are just words and not pictures. So I'm going to go ask a random floating Mod what the official type ruling would be on that so I don't say one thing and it's supposed to be the opposite.

[jamitrius]

Why won't you just write it how the real script would look if it was played out in Code geass. You know, nothing to fancy though, if you catch my drift.

[Takashi8188]

well, that random parady thread gets extreamly close sometimes and none of that is pulled (to my knowlegde)

and what i think i'll have to do, though i'd rather write out the lemon, is i'll make the ep with every lil thing, except the sex scene (sex not rape) like i'll lead up to it, maybe even add a lil bit of the start to it, (i know what i can get by with, but i wont push it too much)

Katt, would that be ok?

[Noble10]

How about this? Instead of the lemon, you link to the Caramelldansen?

No? Fine! You don't don't have to be so mean...

...ignore this post and continue as you were.

[Fear_Itself]

Don't chicken out.  Write the whole thing, but be discreet about it.  Don't post it in this thread, but let people know it's out there without being too specific about what's out there.  Heck, let someone else volunteer to distribute it if you're that scared of the net nannies.