Creative Works

[Bleach117x]

**BLEEP**, these chapters are long...

MORE PLEASE!

[Delta_Eko_Foxtrot]

I read the first chapter. My, that's a lot of reading and text and everything. Very complex - just like Bleach! Are you Tite Kubo?

I look forward to reading all the other chapters. Unfortunately, it's 1:30 in the morning, and my attention wanes.

[Delta_Eko_Foxtrot]

Great writing, by the way! You have a pretty literary style of writing. I think I write like you too, where I like to describe things through complicated metaphors and other interesting devices. It does wonders for your story-telling abilities and makes it so much easier to visualize things.

[DeaconPhenix]

Thanks, I hope you enjoy the story.

[forgingaheart]

Dang Deacon...I think this week, you just might have stolen McDavey's crown on writing fights. 
So go fight it out...LOL!

I do hope Aeorekka is going to be okay and Sanya too.  It's also to bad that Deacon killed someone during the battle.  Still, our trio of ryoka really pwned that stealth squad.  Looking forward to the next chapter.

[McDavey]

Read chapter 21. I am very intrigued to see what Aiber and cho are up to and how Deacon and Aeryk plan on recuing the girl. I forgot her name at the moment, sorry.

[McDavey]

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Delta_Eko_Foxtrot wrote:

I read the first chapter. My, that's a lot of reading and text and everything. Very complex - just like Bleach! Are you Tite Kubo?

I look forward to reading all the other chapters. Unfortunately, it's 1:30 in the morning, and my attention wanes.

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Bleach isnt complex, the guy just doesnt explain anything he does in it

Deacon on the other hand is much better then him and has great stroy

[McDavey]

well that is cool te fighting has started again. I do wonder how much having their sister injured is going to set the back. They still have someone to save also. I also wonder what the heck Ryushin is doing during this time.

[Bad_Witch]

Chapter 21

Ryushin has some troubling memories, poor guy. Regret is the hardest thing to get over. Glad he found the ryoka and gave some help. It will be interesting to see which side Cho and Fujiwara end up. I'm still curious about Mika's dreams and where they will eventually led her.

Chapter 22

Wow. Just wow. That was one nice fight. Deacon unfortunately got his first kill, even if he didn't want it. I hope Aeorekka makes a quick recovery, but with wounds like that...

[Kodai_Okuda]

I've read the first 12 chapters and WOW!  IT's excellent IMHO!

But I'm 10 chapters behind

Love it so far DeaconPhenix,  hope to read more this weekend.

[Blue_Rose_Devil]

Sorry it's been so long since I reviewed your story, I'll try to finish a few chapters tonight.

Chapter 15:

I'm surprised Keisan actually backed down when faced with a possible confrontation of the other captain. Usually people who lust for battle don't care whether their opponent has beaten them before or not. Though perhaps he still has some sense left as well.

Also, I'm curious as to what side Janar will end up on.

[DeaconPhenix]

Have you read the first arc already Kodai? It's not much other than introducing four of the major characters as they fight to the death, but it shows a couple interesting looks into them. I'm glad you are enjoying it so far!

[DeaconPhenix]

Yeah, Zeisan can be pretty bull-headed at times, but I think he saw that he would be embarassed in front of his own subordinate had he locked swords with Cho.

[Blue_Rose_Devil]

I wonder if Cho will end up helping the brothers out, perhaps out of some feeling for the man that he knows was betrayed. It seems like several people know that truth about what happened with Jaxon, yet no one ever spoke up about it. 'Tis the nature of a system I guess; any threat to the way things work could disrupt the entire thing.

[Blue_Rose_Devil]

Chapter 17:

In response to what Asuka says at the end of the chapter... well, now. Isn't that cute? The biggest "female dog" in the story calling one of the protagonists a dog? Hee. Hee. Hee.

The attack was unexpected. At the very least, I'd have thought they attacked her because they found out she was working with Deacon and such, but it seems strange to me that they would just attack her out of thin air like that. Though it seems like each of them wouldn't have a problem doing so I don't really understand it. Could you clarify their reasons for me?

[DeaconPhenix]

Do you remember when Fuji and Gallievo were talking about making either Shuyural or Kolan look like traitors? The attack did one of two things: made Shuyural look like a traitor. The second thing they were trying to accomplish was killing her as well, but shes still around...for now.

[Blue_Rose_Devil]

Ah, I see. I didn't remember that, since I hadn't read the story for quite some time.

It's ironic though, I think, that it wasn't the attack that made her look like a traitor but her "backup". I hope Malvae gets some WD40 for his rusty skills though, because pointy knives won't be enough to kill Deacon.

[DeaconPhenix]

Well they were only assuming she was allied with them and Deacon showing up was like a happy bonus for them. And heck no, no drow could kill the Reaper!

[Blue_Rose_Devil]

Yep. "Silly drow, mid-story deaths are for minor characters!"

[Blue_Rose_Devil]

Haha, when Deacon collided with Sanya the saying "Move, b!tch! Get out of the way!" came to mind.

[Blue_Rose_Devil]

Well, now, it seems that "law" works as well in the Soul Society as it does in the human world. Except Nakashima somehow finds a way to make even the most a-hole judge look like a Red Cross volunteer in comparison.

It seems to me that was less a criminal trial and more of an attempted "morale booster" showing that "traitors will not be tolerated" or something to that effect.

Nakashima seems to represent the very oldest way of thinking there is, especially the way he wants the brothers dead for no more reason than because they're Jaxon's sons....bestard.

[Blue_Rose_Devil]

(chapter 20)

I don't think walking-dead girl will be able to kill either of the brothers. Though I wonder if she'll attack them sometime during the story only to discover that the "black wolf" that she dreamed about was Deacon... perhaps she'll get attacked by the "dastardly duo" only to be saved, for whatever reason, by him.

Oh well, guess I'll find out.

[Blue_Rose_Devil]

Chatper 21:

Good. For a minute I thought you were going to be a jerk and have the other people leave. But since they've joined up now....let us party! *begins dancing for no reason*

Oh, um, *ahem*, that is.... I'm glad they met up. And I wonder what the two captains could find out in the area surrounding the soul society. I can't think of any evidence they could find, but then again, if I could the story wouldn't be as interesting now would it? ha.

[forgingaheart]

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Blue_Rose_Devil wrote:
Yep. "Silly drow, mid-story deaths are for minor characters!"

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I really love that line, BRD.

*Kicks thread*  So...where's the new Chapter? 

I guess the fact there were 15 new posts fooled me.

*Kicks thread again*  Owie!  My toe.

*Checks the IM window to see if your on, so I can remind you to post it.*  Nope!  Dang! 

[DeaconPhenix]

Gahhh, all this kicking!!! Chapter should be up shortly.