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"This object is immensely significant and I now know that you have no idea of what I seek. A life actually is dependent upon the restoration of this artifact." Shade explained.

 

"What do you mean? What is this item?" the captain questioned, not with anger, but an uninformed curiosity. The Reaper breathed deeply, debating in whether he should reveal that information, finally deciding that it cost him nothing to do so if Ryushin was oblivious to its existence.

 

"A tome." he responded evenly.

 

"A tome? A book that can save a life?" Takedo inquired.

 

"It was created by a great priestess and given to my stepmother years ago. It is said that this tome contains a powerful spell of resurrection." Shade spoke.


Ah ha!  now we know what the stolen item is.  Interesting development but, somehow of course, the use of, or lack of the use of that book ends up being important two both men.  So now I wander who Shade is trying to save.

 

Also, staying to primarily to the first names helped me to keep track of the action.

 

 

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yeah I am also glad to see what that book of spells mean, and I am glad to see the progress in the fight, I can't wait to see them get down to it and go all out, that is if they dont get interupted or something. It is also nice to see the Shikai in these fights, a flamberge I believe it was and aa duoble bladed schythe, guess these to like to fight with some heavy duty weapons, and can see what tehre powers might be from your discription. Still a bit suprised to see someone wearing armor, but it does show some individuality.  Heh although some of my characters in my story do in other stages, but anyway, I wonder how big the opposing force is, I would like to try to guess what their chances are, welll anyway, nice to read your story again, later
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when I get a chance I will try to read it... if My bro McD likes it then I have to read it he can be a bit critical at times but he means well so dont get discuraged if anyone seis anything bad about it.... I am on a major case of writers block being I was writing up a storm then family issues came up and all my creativity stopped.
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i've been able to read up thru chapter 3 tonight! Really good stuff Deacon! I look forward to catching up completely!! It's gonna be tough knowing who to root for, i like both sides so far! :smileyvery-happy:
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thanks gypsy, the thing I loved about these **there is no 4** characters is that the reader can sympathize or relate to any one of them. It's kind of unfortunate that they all got caught in an unavoidable situation with nothing to do but uphold their morals. thanks for reading and I'm definitely excited about the feedback!

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well, it took a little bit longer than I expected, but the next chapter is up and an important flashback leads to quite the revelation. Enjoy!

 

 

 

ACT 3: Boketsuwohoru (Bringing Calamity Upon One's Self)

 

 

Chapter 8

 

Victor felt the sudden change in reiatsu even though he was now miles away from the original battlefield and he knew that Shuuketsukarite had entered the fight. He grimaced, knowing that Ryushin wouldn't have released his shikai unless Shade had given him necessary cause. He had hoped that they wouldn't have required the elevated use of their zanpakuto, but the unfortunately talented Aeryk Valkryon was making him a fast believer as well. Still... he would try to hold out as long as he could so as not to worry his friend and break his concentration.

"Did you sense that shift carried on the wind?" Aeryk inquired.

 

Victor smiled, seeing that Aeryk had developed many heightened senses. "I did. What you felt was a fluctuation of Ryushin's spiritual pressure."

 

"Aye, but what of the deep sadness that was ferried with it?" Aeryk asked. "I doubt that your friend would be remorseful in raising his power against my brother."

 

That recognition forced Victor to pause as he had originally thought the opposite of Takedo. As he addressed the feeling a second time, Victor concluded that the wiser-than-his-own-good opponent had hit it right on the mark. Moreover, the captain was then assaulted with two images that explained the feeling of sorrow. The first, a memory that he was only able to experience because of the doushikai that connected his spirit to Ryushin's own, was a horrible scene that Takedo had been a part of after the final battle of Hanran.

 

The flashing sights of the Soul Society alerted Valtherion that Ryushin was sprinting through the streets frantically and a panic churned in Victor's stomach. There was a sound of skidding wood against concrete and then their shared vision halted and focused on a nearby building, Victor recognizing it as the Squad 4 nejiro. The sight panned down and the view made Victor want to scream, roar, vomit and cry all at the same time, for at the base of the building lay Amane Michiyo. She was turned away from Ryushin (and Victor), her arm draped across her body, almost as if pointing to the pinnacle of Squad 4. Her captain's robe, the same one that she had acquired six months before at the death of Kazuki Fujiwara, was in tatters and had been slashed in several places. Her red hair was redder than it should have been and the short, razored cut that she wore it in, that same style that had bobbed freely in a calm wind, was matted to the back of her head. The sight of her body grew much closer and as a shaking hand turned her over, Victor felt great heartbreak. Amane's once rosy cheeks were as pale as the skin of Shade the Reaper. The full, red lips that Ryushin had lovingly kissed had turned purple and the sprightly light blue eyes that had oft stared longingly into Takedo's orbs were now devoid of life. Her forehead was covered in scarlet lifeblood from a bludgeoning blow that had taken her last breath. Victor's vision watered and then went red with rage.

 

His mind then traveled to another memory, one that had belonged to Victor and hundreds of others that had gathered that day in stunned silence at the base of the grand staircase that led to the Captain's Hall.

 

Ryushin was scaling those stairs, his saiai, his dear Amane, cradled in his arms. The blue hair that Ryushin normally spiked high was unkempt and fell dejectedly down his shoulders. He had removed her captain's robe, which had become his in her death, and it rested on his right shoulder neglected, his eyes on her the whole walk. His own robe he wore without sleeves and there was blood covering his arms up to the elbows. It was also drenched down the front of his robe and had smeared on his face, but he didn't notice for there was a look of determination on Ryushin's face that made Victor shiver in fear. Takedo had been imprisoned that day and Michiyo buried in an unmarked grave several miles away.

 

Valtherion blinked out of the painful experience and focused on Aeryk, whose face appeared ashen as if he had caught part of that memory. Victor ignored it, knowing not to underestimate Aeryk's ability, but also understanding that the memory held no relevance to the young man. Deciding not to delay the fight any longer, Victor said, "unlike your sword, which has one level of power that ascends at your will, a soul reaper's zanpakuto has three separate levels, each with its own varying power. Shikai is the second level of a zanpakuto and Ryushin has just initiated this stage. He is a master in shikai and you should have reason to fear for your brother's life.”

 

“Then I will have to end this fight quickly.” Aeryk responded, sounding more determined than he had at anytime during the battle. “Fenyerosseg, strike him down!”

 

Valkryon’s blade flashed brightly, exuding a golden aura. He swung the broadsword in the air and the reiatsu fired three missiles of aurulent energy at the captain. Victor rolled hard to the side and the darts struck the mud behind him, sizzling upon impact. Aeryk volleyed another series of three, this time on a wider arc and with greater speed. Victor jumped to his feet and ran, dodging the first bullet and blocking the second with his sword. He dove to avoid the final missile, but it struck him in the side, burning where it came in contact with his skin.

Aeryk charged, swinging his sword at his opponent. The resplendent blade trailed reiatsu, making it hard to distinguish where the actual weapon was. Victor threw his blade out awkwardly, fortunately blocking the attack. Aeryk counterbalanced the zanpakuto and struck again, but Victor jumped to the side, the trailing energy searing the edges of his white robe. Victor desperately kicked out, connecting with the hilt of the sword and burning his own foot in the process.

 

Victor used three agile back-handsprings to clear some distance between Aeryk and himself. He was running out of time and used the spare moment to send a thought out to Ryushin. Remember what I told you, meiyuu. Fight for her memory and make this battle a tribute to Amane’s integrity. Her love for you is so strong that she wishes to wait an eternity before she sees you in the afterlife. Do not disappoint her.

With that, Valtherion held his sword before him and announced, “it is time to release my shikai as well, Aeryk. Now Dokuja, the Poisonous Serpent, enter your true form! Scourge, Sanchuudoku, the Acid Poisoning!” He passed his hand over the zanpakuto and it transformed into a large scimitar with an adamantine jade blade. A silver crosspiece developed, arching down the hilt to protect his hand. A hissing sounded from Sanchuudoku, as it appeared ready to snap at its adversary.

 

There was no further need for words as the two thundered toward each other.

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Nice Chapter.  The flashback was really sad, but it helps understand the friendship and character of both Captains.

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alright! so i'm thru chapter 6 now. i'm really enjoying the battle scenes, you've mixed the actual fighting with the combatants dialogue with each other very well, which really helps keep it interesting. i can't wait to find out what this item is that Aeryk and Shade are after, and what the story is behind it! i also like how you've weaved the imagary of the storm in with the battle (but i love a good thunderstorm! :smileyvery-happy::smileyvery-happy: ) i'm looking forward to chapters 7 & 8 when i can get to them!! :smileyhappy:
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lol, so I guess for me, this was kinda a huge break for me considering how fast I was pumping the chapters out. I wanted to dedicate some time to catching up on Furion's story as well as read the latest from J and McD. Great job to all! I'm definitely getting some inspiration from you guys to take my writing to the next level and I hope I can do the same as well. Anyway, I will have the next chapter out by Thursday at the latest, so do not fear! Lol, hope everything is going well with everyone. Peace!

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So, the next chapter is up. It's a short one, but I will have the next one up by Saturday at the latest, so I hope you guys are all liking it so far.

 

 

Chapter 9

 

 

Ryushin weaved his zanpakuto in tight arcs, balancing himself with the much larger weapon. Swirls of red and blue passed through the rain and as Takedo’s arcs gained speed, the colors became a blur. The captain rushed forward and as his spinning seized, he thrust the polearm out red blade first, intending to gut the Reaper. Shade blocked the attack easily, but as the red blade spun back, it was replaced by the blue sickle slicing directly at his chest. The larger warrior reacted immediately, swinging his blade back to deflect, but the flamberge Moonsong only clipped the zanpakuto and Shuuketsukarite cut underneath a pauldron and into Shade’s arm.

 

Cursing in pain, the Reaper lunged forward, grabbing the captain by the collar and smashing him in the face with his own forehead. Ryushin stumbled backwards, his hands to his face, and in that time, Shade felt a penetrating chill enter his bloodstream. He looked to his arm to see the deep wound freezing over with a cap of ice. The attack began to paralyze his arm, but Shade roared in defiance and the ice shattered, a fresh spattering of blood running down his arm.

 

Ryushin tore his hands away from his face, gripping his weapon tightly. He stared at the Reaper with a wavering vision, his face a bloody mess. “You broke my nose, you bastard!” Takedo howled. “I will have your head for this!”

 

Shade shook off the lingering effects of his wound and attacked, Moonsong hacking down at the vulnerable captain. With drops of red flying from his face, Ryushin jumped into the air, holding his staff lengthwise to block. His momentum proved greater than Shade’s attack and as the locked weapons moved up into the air, Ryushin kicked downward, connecting with the Reaper’s ribs. Shade stumbled back with a grunt of surprise and as Ryushin landed, he planted his weapon in the mud and swung his body around it, sending another flying kick that struck Shade hard in the jaw. The Reaper sprawled down in the mud, the force of the blow rolling him away from his attacker.

 

Ryushin saw the opportunity to end the battle and he sprang forward, Shuuketsukarite again set to carve a deadly wound. Shade reacted faster than Ryushin thought possible, launching his own sword out. The two weapons clashed incredibly fast and for the first time in the fight, both combatants lost their hold and Shuuketsukarite and Moonsong went spinning away into the mud. The captain jumped forward, intending to kick his opponent in the face, but Shade stepped to the side quickly. He grabbed the captain by the waist and body-slammed him into the mud, knocking Takedo’s breath from him. Shade delivered two quick punches to his stomach before moving to retrieve his sword.

Takedo the drizzle his knees up to his chest and jolted upward, landing on his feet evenly in the mud. Like a lightning strike, he punched outward, landing a shot in the small of Shade’s back. The Reaper dropped to his knees in agony, but turned and punched back. Ryushin crossed his arms, blocking the heavy shot and he backhanded Shade furiously across the face. A spray of blood and a freed tooth flew from his mouth and the enraged warrior jumped to his feet. He punched out again, but Takedo ducked and jabbed twice in Shade’s bruised ribs.

 

Catching the Reaper dazed, Ryushin stepped back and launched another of his devastating kicks. Shade caught him by the ankle, but Takedo used the balance to jump up and kick with his other leg, aiming for the face. Somehow Shade was able to lock down that leg as well and he threw Ryushin up into the air. The power of the toss flipped Ryushin back and he landed roughly in the mud face down.

 

The Reaper sprinted for his sword, but Ryushin dove forward, grabbing him by the ankle and tripping him. He continued to crawl forward, but Ryushin pushed him over. Jumping atop the Reaper, Takedo viciously punched him in the face over and over. Remembering his own broken nose, the captain leaned back, preparing to drive his forehead into Shade’s face. At that moment, the sprawled fighter reached out and grabbed Moonsong and held it out. A flash of black energy blinded the captain and as he fell back in surprise, Shade swung his sword up, cutting through the sash that held the now sleeveless robe together and drawing a thin line of blood on Ryushin’s bloodied stomach.

Shade got to his feet and used a moment to spit more blood down to the ground. Ryushin, who was still sitting on his knees, held his stomach in anguish. The Reaper drove a fist down, pummeling Ryushin in the temple, sending him careening down, the only thing preventing him from falling face first being his hands as they dug into the mud.

 

The Reaper looked down at the captain with no pity, a sheer rage still evident on his face. “What justice you have, Ryushin Takedo! You have the pride of staring down into the earth with shame. How can you deny me this tome, even after you were told that it is going to save a life?” Shade asked through gritted teeth.

 

“Because resurrection breaks the order of nature!” Ryushin cried out. Shade kicked him hard in the ribs and the captain doubled over in pain.

“You know nothing of resurrection or natural order, you idiot!” the Reaper yelled down at his adversary. “Order was placed into this world by the gods and it is those very gods that can bend the laws of nature, heathen dog.”

 

“But it changes a form into an unnatural being. Resurrections cannot be performed without consequences!” Takedo declared, feeling past and present pain as he uttered the phrase he had heard before from Commander-General Nakashima.

 

Shade knelt down to the sprawled captain. “Look at me, Ryushin. I am the most unnatural thing to ever disgrace this world, but I still live and thrive on your beloved ‘order’. I am changed, yet I live in the way of justice, just like you claim to with your captain’s regalia. An altered existence beats having no existence.”

 

“Who are you to demand access to this spell then? If order can be bent by your proclaimed ‘gods’, why not ask your Edaluna to assist you?” Ryushin asked. “Or is it because you have been resurrected that you believe you have the rights of gods?”

 

“You are still unable to see the precious commodity that is life.” Shade exclaimed, shaking his head. He rose to his feet and held his sword at the ready. “The only way that you are going to learn is if I take your life from you myself.”

 

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I've got to feel a bit sorry for Ryushin Takedo, he's fighting a battle that only a few years before, he would of been on the other side of the argument. 

 

It's funny, but something tells me, that the story of how Commander-General Nakashima came by the tome, the book of spells is going to be an interesting story.

 

But the whole aspect of the natural order of things, and regarding resurrection as being unnatural, reminds me of FMA.

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that's a nice observation. i don't think i even noticed that until now lol.

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heh, I think I liked this one more then others, I liked to see them get down and dirty, not so much form and poize lolz. Bringing somethnig back, yeah I told Forging that about FMA when we were on the headsets (wolf's flower maiden is forging and my love ^_^) but yeah, I dont like the thought of resurecting someone, seems so unnatural. I dont agree with fighting just to fallow orders either though, too mindless. That is why I would never go into the armed forces, but anywho, I really liked this one :smileyhappy:
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Ryushin is in quite the predicament right now lol. Out of all the characters, i think i enjoyed writing his the most because the captain is stuck in a situation where he is contradicting himself at points. Where Victor fights for law and the ryoka are fighting to retrieve the tome, Ryushin is stuck between his undying love and the justice bound to his heart.

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Okay, I just wanted to say that I appreciate and enjoy all of the feedback that I have gotten from this story. I don't care if I have 5 or 500 readers, if I can bring something new to the table that people enjoy reading, it makes me happy. Having said that, I am concerned with my own mega quick story posting. Being relatively new to the boards, I can only expect a handful of readers at first. With McDavey's great thread out there, new readers may venture over here and check out the story and I say "Welcome all!". So as not to make it hard for other readers to catch up, I'm going to slow down my chapter posting to once a week to give people a better chance to read the stuff I already have posted. This doesn't mean I'm taking a break or going on hiatus (I actually have the entire story already typed out and ready to go). But I do want to stretch the story out a bit more (the battle's already halfway through) to keep people with something to read.

 

What I need to know is, what would the best night during the week be to update? I don't want to post on the same night as other writers and I'm still not entirely sure who posts what on what night.

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like I told Cid schedule is a relative term at this point, I am supposed to on Thursdays, and Jingai does on Wendnesday besides that tehre isnt much else I could tell you, but posting on a week by week basis is not a bad idea, people are cought up in the ones they read now so this is a good idea, and perhaps it will give more people a chance to catch up :smileyhappy:
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yeah i was just afraid with having so much to catch up on, people would shy away from reading my story. So, I'm thinking Friday night maybe? I know people are busy Fridays, but I still see a lot of people on usually.

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with more fics on hiatus i don't think it's as much of an issue, but yeah, friday night sounds like a good night to me, but then i'm on at least once a night anyways ^_^ I think releasing them weekly will be easier for me to keep up with it - especially if i know what night to look for it *yeah i know, i svck, i still need to catch up to where you currently are! * :smileyvery-happy:
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lol you're right around the corner gypsy. don't worry! so, next chapter will be Friday then. thanks for the suggestions.

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thoughts on chapter 7:

i really enjoyed this chapter! i felt so bad for Ryushin when he found out the item was the book, and all that implied. I'm still liking both characters though :smileyvery-happy: I wonder who Shade needs to save. awesome fight scene, it was very easy to picture everything that was going on and and feel the emotion/determination of each of them. Ryushin has a cool sounding Shikai, can't wait to see it in action. makes me wonder about his bankai!

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woo hoo i'm caught up!! (this is gypsy's alt by they way :smileyhappy: )
i really enjoyed these last 2 chapters! the flashback was very sad! both pairs of guys seem to have very interesting connections between themselves.
i'm secretly wishing that the 4 will combine forces! :smileyhappy: lolz, ok, maybe not so secretly! :smileyvery-happy::smileyvery-happy:

oh and i loved this paragraph for some reason, i can just picture shade's roar! awesome!

Cursing in pain, the Reaper lunged forward, grabbing the captain by the collar and smashing him in the face with his own forehead. Ryushin stumbled backwards, his hands to his face, and in that time, Shade felt a penetrating chill enter his bloodstream. He looked to his arm to see the deep wound freezing over with a cap of ice. The attack began to paralyze his arm, but Shade roared in defiance and the ice shattered, a fresh spattering of blood running down his arm.
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cool, I'm glad you liked it! More coming in a few days....

Bleach FF: Arc 1: The Battle of Four Dragons Arc 2: Eternal Tomorrow Arc 3: Destiny Exiled




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Well, Friday has rolled around and the next chapter is ready to go. This a very revealing chapter and definitely not one to miss. It has been one of my favorites to write because it packs so much emotion into these characters and it shows a lot of their personality. As always, thanks for reading and your feedback is much appreciated. Here is the revelation......

 

 

 

 

Chapter 10:

 

The hissing scimitar known as Sanchuudoku chopped down at Valkryon, but the gold-eyed warrior slashed across with his broadsword, deflecting the jade sword wide. Aeryk launched his own attack, the glowing Fenyerosseg shooting for Valtherion’s throat. In a flash of green burning air, Victor spun his blade back and blocked, shoving Valkryon away from him.

 

“You are going to have to be faster than that to defeat Sanchuudoku. This serpent’s acid poisoning is all-consuming, so defend me at your own risk!” Victor shouted and as he slashed his sword in the air, a blast of green venom shot from the blade, directed at Aeryk, who heard the searing in the air and quickly sidestepped, allowing the acid to fly past him untouched. He rebounded with a lob of golden spears, but Victor sent forth another wave and the acid melted right through the energy missiles.

 

Aeryk exploded into motion behind the display, charging ahead with his sword shining through the rain. The swords clashed together a dozen times, sparks of gold and green flying around the warriors. Aeryk used his Flash Step to get behind Victor, but the captain was there immediately to block the attack, following the move by twisting his body and kicking Aeryk in the side. As the kensai tumbled forward, Victor hooked his arm, flipping the warrior on his back. Valkryon landed hard with a wheeze, but as Victor stabbed downward, Aeryk rolled through the mud and jumped to his feet. Catching the blond fighter with his back turned, Victor drew a circle in the air and launched a halo of poison. Aeryk whipped around, but had no chance to dodge as the attack blasted him right in the chest and quickly began to eat through his leather vest as he was knocked down to the seat of his pants. With stinging fingernails, he dug at the deteriorating shirt, the surging heat burning at his chest. He tore off the remaining fabric and threw it away, his warrior’s body now covered in mud and blisters.

 

Anger overriding his panic, Aeryk gained his feet and bombarded the captain with a hellfire attack, missiles coursing in from all angles. Victor used the Flash Step, fleeting in and out of sight as he dodged the barrage of golden reiatsu. He appeared directly in front of Valkryon and struck, but Aeryk nimbly ducked and launched the hilt of his sword upward, clipping Victor in the temple. He then redirected his attack forward with the blade. Victor turned and dodged, but the sword sliced a deep cut in his captain's robe.

 

Realizing that he was in a precarious position now with his back turned, Valtherion used shunpo to retreat, but Aeryk was right behind him, hacking away with his sword and cutting the white robe into tatters. In a split second, Victor stopped and turned, throwing off the robe into Aeryk's face. Aeryk slashed through the material, but the momentary blindness allowed Victor to stab out with his Sanchuudoku. The kensai halted his pursuit and leaned back as far as he could, but the serpentine blade skimmed his left cheek, cutting a lesion from his lip to the jawline.

 

Aeryk Valkryon realized that the cut was a serious one, but he saw an opening and kept the momentum of his body, jumping up and snap-kicking Valtherion in the chin. Victor fell down on his back and moved as fast as he could to gain his feet, but an energy beam crackled toward him, slicing through his black robe and drawing a deep wound in his right arm. He responded instantaneously with a shot of his own, the acid smacking Aeryk right in the shoulder.

 

Both warriors remained on their knees, cradling various wounds. The side of Aeryk's face was bleeding profusely and his shoulder singed, smoking even in the pouring rain. Victor, however, had bit off the tip of his tongue during the kick and blood poured from his clenched teeth as well as down his right arm. As the action had lessened, so did the rain, the drizzle doing nothing to relieve Aeryk's burns. Through garbled words, Victor asked, "who was it that died?"

 

There was an obviously confused expression on Valkryon's face and Victor clarified, "your brother must have revealed your mission for I have picked up this thought from Captain Takedo. You seek to reconnect a soul to its fallen body."

 

Aeryk wiped a growing streak of blood from his face, smearing a stinging line of mud across the wound. "Have you ever taken a woman's hand in marriage, Victor?" he questioned.

 

The captain was caught off-guard, but he understood then the true purpose of the intruding ryoka. Sighing, he responded, "there is no legal form of marriage in the Soul Society, but I have loved a few women in my lifetime. There are even unspoken feelings between my lieutenant and myself."

 

"So you understand the strength of determination by a loving relationship?" Valkryon inquired.

 

"Aye, love is a powerful emotion."

 

"Then you realize the turmoil and heartbreak of losing a loved one." Aeryk stated. As Victor nodded again, he continued, "you have lived much longer than I have, Captain Valtherion, and you have experienced much more than I, but we have a commonality between us. We have both loved and lost." Valkryon explained.

 

"It is your wife that you fight for wholeheartedly." Victor concluded, not liking the course that their conversation was taking.

 

"My love, Noniko, was stricken with a poison from an assassin that has since lost his life to my own hand." Aeryk declared. "She sickened and there was not a priest in the land that could cure her. They explained that it was a slow-moving poison, but there was nothing that they could do for her and Noniko only had a few months to live."

 

Victor digested the information, finding a sickening churn in his stomach. The tone with which Aeryk Valkryon spoke to him reminded Victor painfully of a younger Ryushin. Aeryk continued, "my sister Aeorekka has traveled with us these long miles, offering as much aid as she could to my Noniko as Shade and I have searched for this book, our key to breaking a supposed inevitable fate. Despite my sister's best efforts, Noniko perished this past week."

 

Victor stared down at the ground, unable to prevent his sympathetic heart from feeling badly for his enemy. In that moment, he thought of the emotionless shell that Ryushin had become after Hanran and the conflict that must have torn at Takedo's very soul as he regrettably let go of his love. Victor saw the haunting images of Amane Michiyo, the unfortunate death of the woman almost causing the same in his dear friend Ryushin. Surprisingly, Victor Valtherion also thought of Janelle and the fondness that he knew they mutually shared for each other. She had worried so much for him this past morning and he had dismissed her concerns as injudicious paranoia. What a fool he now felt facing this young man who was ready to give his own life for a most amatory cause, albeit one that Aeryk did not understand the consequences of if success came to him.

 

"You have embarked on a very noble quest, but it is also a foolish one." Victor stated sternly.

 

"Your opinion means less to me than a fool's babbling." Aeryk retorted. "I was not going to sit back and watch her die in front of me! I thought you understood love and heartbreak."

 

"I do, but this spell that you seek is forbidden to all mortals that walk this earth, regardless of their motive." Valtherion replied. "The sacrilege that you will perform in resurrecting a deceased one will damn your very soul."

 

"I do not care. I will do whatever is necessary to bring her back to me." Aeryk roared through tears that burnt his bloodied face.

 

"The temple that you must go to is in a land surrounded by archfiends and guarded by demons. To disturb these grounds will only bring calamity upon yourself." Victor explained.

 

"I will not tell you again, Valtherion. Noniko will be mine again and neither you, your Soul Society, or a clergy of black demons will stop me!" the kensai forcefully demanded. "You have grown old and have not the iron will that I maintain to achieve my goal. It is with this spirit that I shall destroy you!"

 

"No, you will not. It is your sight blinded by grief that has forced my action now." Victor spoke angrily. "You will see the final form of my zanpakuto and it will shatter your pigheaded will."

 

The two warriors gripped their weapons tightly and rose to their feet, their wounds completely forgotten. A violent wind whipped around Victor as he held his green sword out in front of him, blade facing upward into the storm clouds. The wind developed into several funnels that flew outward from the captain, the miniature gales billowing Valkryon's bloodshot eyes and testing his resolve. The sky took on a diseased green tint that seemed to pulse with Sanchuudoku. Victor let go of his sword and it remained in the air, floating and gathering power.

 

"Bankai."

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Fun chapter to read, and it looks like your going to kick it up a notch in the next chapter, bankai style.

 

"My love, Noniko, was stricken with a poison from an assassin that has since lost his life to my own hand." Aeryk declared. "She sickened and there was not a priest in the land that could cure her. They explained that it was a slow-moving poison, but there was nothing that they could do for her and Noniko only had a few months to live."

 

Aeryk continued, "my sister Aeorekka has traveled with us these long miles, offering as much aid as she could to my Noniko as Shade and I have searched for this book, our key to breaking a supposed inevitable fate. Despite my sister's best efforts, Noniko perished this past week."

 

So this was the reason why.  BTW, I wonder where his sister Aeorekka is now?

 

The sky took on a diseased green tint that seemed to pulse with Sanchuudoku. Victor let go of his sword and it remained in the air, floating and gathering power.

 

"Bankai."

 

Cool!  Can't wait to see the Victor's Bankai.

 

Funny, I seem to remember ending a chapter on that word too.  Of course, I suspect you did it for the same dramatic reason I used.

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Aeorekka has a very tiny part in this story. She is currently staying with Noniko a couple of miles away while the boys fight it out.

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